a social issues poem

by - 8/03/2015 08:53:00 pm

I wrote a poem a few weeks back, and I was going to leave it untouched in my folders, but then Cindy hosted a writing competition called OYEAS Competition (it's short for Open Your Eyes and See, but I always say it as "Oh yes!"). So I'm entering! Sweet.


It's awfully hollow for a post, but I hope this poem will give you enough food for thought, just in fewer words.

Flesh
via
flesh is beautiful
as I child I was frightened of skeletons
rotting carcasses intimate with flies
old Jolly Roger smiling amidst the seas
yes, I never quite liked the idea of
my organs in a treasure chest

but we are told to shrink
to chop away at our beloved flesh
thinning, as women are supposed to thin
at what was once a loyal companion
is to be jettisoned, cut away
as if weight is something that can be
trimmed back with scissors
as if beauty is more to do with
numbers than characters


Tell me if there's a line that you don't understand (I tend to have inside jokes with myself)! Criticism is always, always welcome.

PS. I was thinking of posting weekly instead of twice per week. Any thoughts?

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  1. I also tagged you for the TMI Tag!

    This is the third time I've read this poem, in the space of about an hour and I still love it so much! Well done! 💖💕😘

    - www.whatlexieloves.blogspot.com

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    1. Thank you so much, Lexie! For your kind words and for tagging me. :) I'll definitely check it out.

      Oh, and I saw the mojis through my email notification, don't worry. :')

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  2. This was great- but I think you misspelled "amidst" in the fourth line. I love hearing from you twice a week, but whatever works best for you ^-^ What makes you want to change how often you post???

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    1. Oh, thanks. XD Really? That's interesting to hear. Life's just getting busier and busier, and most of my readers probably only have time to read one juicy post instead of two big ones. Thanks for your comment, it makes me think. :)

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  3. Wow, that poem was great! Body image... Who would have guessed? I've been reading this over and over; I can't help it!

    Hmm... You've been blogging for quite some time now, so I think that it's up to you to decide on what you want to do. Some posts does carry of its freshness a while longer than other posts, so if you write a post but think it's only going to last half of the week then write another post for that week. It's all up to you!

    xoxo Morning

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    1. Thank you! Yeah, sorry if my poems are vague. :')

      Wow, that's a brilliant point. Your right, some posts just don't have substance, and some do. I really never thought about it like that. Thanks so much for your advice!

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  4. ooh wow. that was really good, jo. really good.
    i agree with morning; personally i think it depends on post content, but the blogger gets to decide. and that would be you ^_^ i'm a pretty bad blogger myself, since i haven't even posted in a while, but i'm hoping to get back to that.

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    1. Thanks, Autumn!
      Yeah, Morning made a terrific point. I'm leaning towards doing that at the moment. :) I've noticed that you haven't come up in my dash recently! I don't think it makes you a bad blogger, though. :')

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  5. That was amazing; I've read it several times now. ;)
    I think you should do what feels right in terms of blogging. Personally, I enjoy hearing from you twice a week, but it honestly is not worth it if it's not making you happy. You don't ever want to get tired of blogging, so self-satisfaction is always important, Jo. xx
    ~ Sanjana
    peridotcove.blogspot.com

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    1. Thank you! :) It seems everyone has, isn't that odd?
      That's news to me, big news! Maybe I'll reconsider. :) It makes me happier to post more regularly, to be honest, but I lack in time. Maybe I should cut my post length...
      That's a very good point, thank you for your thoughtful comment!

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  6. Ehhhhhhhh that was awesome. Had to reread it for the awesome-ness to really sink in...the message is so precious and cannot be said enough. *claps vigorously* xx

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    1. Thanks, Elisabeth. :) I'm quite worried now, it seems everyone read it more than once? Haha.

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    2. oh don't feel worried, it's good thing (;

      (also i sent you an email [to bearableblog@gmail.com] about this post. check it out when you can? <3 hahaha)

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    3. Ah I see. ;)

      (Got it! Read and replied. :))

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  7. GAAAAAH. That was amazing. I love the visceral image and of course the social issues -- feminist poems are the best, IMO, tying than myth poems. Of course feminist myth poetry is the best, but your poem is still SO SO SO GOOD.

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    1. THANK YOU. Social issues peoms are the best poems, and I've also been getting into feminist poems of late. Have you heard of slam poetry? There's a great spoken word poem about feminism called "Rape Joke" on Youtube, I think you'd like it! And thanks so, so much, Akyssa. :)

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  8. You should write when you want to, when you find the inspiration. Never before that.

    / Avy
    http://MyMotherFuckedMickJagger.blogspot.com




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    1. Good advice, thanks!

      Your URL. :')

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  9. Wow, Jo! That poem was amazing...like many of the others, I had to reread it as well. My favourite part has got to be;
    "yes, I never quite liked the idea of
    my organs in a treasure chest"

    (although, shouldn't it be 'no, I never quite liked...'? Sorry for the awkward quoting, by the way: I'm never sure what the rules are when the part of the poem you are quoting exceeds one line, since the spacing is part of the art. ~)

    About your blog, I agree that Morning does make an excellent point, and I completely agree! But generally, you should feel comfortable with when you post. I don't think you should be taking advice from me, though! I'm the worst when it comes to my posting 'schedule'. :]

    x Yasmine
    Cloudy

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    1. Yasmine, you are doing far better than me my friend. xD

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    2. Thank you, Yasmine! Where I come, 'yes' means 'no' and 'no' means 'yes'. It's like America English and UK/Australian English. Confusing, right? :') Spacing is totally part of the art! We are visual beings.

      Yeah, it was incredibly helpful! Thanks for your advice, Yasmine. I think your post timings are just fine. :)

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  10. Amazing poem, I'm so impressed!

    To answer your question, yes. Post when your heart tells you to. While I'd love to have more content from you, don't kill the fuzzy bunny. (Gah, the fact you can even post more than once a month is super admirable.)

    Keep it up, your doing amazing. I'm glad I was able to find your blog.

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    1. Thanks, Lyndsey! :)

      Hahaha, I like posting, doing so once a month would be difficult for me. That's really good advice, thank you! I won't kill the fuzzy bunny, which I assume is my love and motivation for blogging. Or my muse. :')

      Thank you, I'm glad to have the opportunity to meet new bloggers like you!

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  11. Wow, that's an amazing poem Jo! I'd miss your posts, but sometimes cutting back it a good thing :)

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    1. Thanks, Opal! That's really kind of you, but your piece of advice is also true. I'll have to see what I want and go from there. :)

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